Recent read comment--why does a story not work?

... took me a little while to figure out why. Okay, the main character, Corinna, was born ...really care whether she finds the old hippie, why should I? In terms of her relationship or...readily obtained locally anyway. It's never clear why the smugglers bothered. There is a running thread about someone who "is becoming a murderer...you don't abuse them, or would go away if you said "I don't care about...

Sure, I can get spurious WM_MOUSEMOVE messages, but why do they keep streaming in?

..., I can get spurious WM_MOUSEMOVE messages, but why do they keep streaming in? I wrote .... In particular, the reasoning fails to explain why a stream of WM_MOUSEMOVE messages is being generated....interested because this continuous stream of messages suck away resources that could be used for something ... CPU and preventing your screen saver from running, but is also draining your wireless mouse ...

Please don't say you'll ever go away and tell me all my love's in vain

...last one was pretty sucky and still is but we talked about it, so. It still sucks but I got out why it sucks and we're (re: I) am trying to be a little calmer and take all this as it ...point, fuck fuck fuck!) and go back to McDonalds and get into the CAPAA summer scheme again and spend my summer running about like a crazy lady. But I also won't see most of the Leeds crew and Dave until September so....

FICLET: Of Nicking, Smelly Tubes, and Firewhisky (Harry/G.Goyle)

... before his fourth year, Harry slipped away from the Dursley’s, army duffel ... arm and he was running – why am I running? – beside a boy around ... “Just, ah, wanted to get away from home.” “Ah… same here.” ...He cleared his throat and looked away. “Uh… well… I mean, uh, I don’t see why not…” Well, except maybe the fact...him for the past three years. “Why?” “’Cause, “ Goyle shrugged and looked at...

Welcome to My Nightmare 18: New Beginnings

... passive stare on the other man. "Why would I consider doing that?"... the tension I know is running through him. I ease up ... at the speed he races away to dwell in the safety ... I sipped at my drink. "Why did Spender allow you to ... his contract to you, Rose? Why do you ask? What do ... have expected him to come away from the nightmare without wanting ... he is ready." "And his running away is all right with ...

what??

... shot two people in the back, one seven months before the other. In each instance, the person killed was running away from the cop. The cop said he saw them put their hands to their waistbands and assumed they were pulling... back. If this guy weren't a cop, he'd be in prison. Why are we so okay with people shooting other people so long as they have a...

Fic - Face The Truth

... fit to contact me since running away so I really wouldn...a strangled choking noise. “But why here?” Kitten asked, tears welling...him. What’s his name?” “Why should-“ An angry growl escaped...now?” Varekai asked, pulling Kitten away from his memories. “Wait!” The...straightening out his clothes and running his fingers through his thinning...continued sobbing drew his attention away. “If you dare come after...

... with light the artist's muted mind. I'm not a writer but I can effectively declare with no doubts that running away from your reality for a while is compatible for any busy mind in order to escape from muddled turns of a monotonous or stressful life just like mine. Why Manchester? It's a very pacific way to repudiate my home town which I never have ...

Fic: "Undo It" (Part One) - W.I.P.

... table, a faint pink line running across his cheek where the ... dragon. All four boys scattered, running away as it unfolded leathery...sound of muffled chatter ebbed away as they all retreated back...the bottle of Firewhisky." "B'why?" Sirius looked genuinely curious. "Because...wrist before Remus could walk away. Remus could feel each one...the bathroom. Remus could hear running water, and the smacking of...

Distractions in the Lower City [Final Fantasy Tactics, Mustadio/Ovelia, PG]

... her long hair. "It isn't running away if I plan on coming back," she thought. The problem wasn'... I wish to turn my mind away from such troubling matters for the ... considered it, after the surprise of running into Ovelia on the scrapdealers' street... they were. They helped her turn away from the internal storm, allowing her ...as Mustadio thought over her request. Why had she asked that in the...