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...!its the only good long-term story i've read on here about the whole gang:),although i do realize that its Barbin/Milly centered.the third chapter was alittle boring sentance wise.you need to find a synonymn for agree and try to say 'change all of our lives' in different words b/c its getting alittle repetitive.& in Chap 2 there were some grammatical errors.well bye.pls continue its great so far!&...

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Published: 6 months, 2 weeks ago (Sun, 28 Dec 2008 13:36:25 PST); 1961 bytes
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