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... he and Starshine reunite and leave--my impression is that he's so miserable trying to look after himself that he might as well let her do it for him again, but I do not share Corinna's apparent impression that her parents' love is rekindled. There's no sign of it. There are other plot threads--Corinna, who describes herself as fat, seems to battle the cult to protect other fat people from them. ...

... boots. And also start wearing stuff in a cyber-goth type of style (at least for clubbing). So everyone knows I like metal, goth, industrial and techno. Mix that with a bit of androgyny - and everyone will know I'm queer/genderqueer too. The kink should be more apparent too. First step - die my hair again (black this time), get a metal t-shirt. The rest will happen when I've got more funds.

[ST/TWW] This Is What's Next :: PG-13 :: Gen :: 1/1

..., handing off her padd to her assistant. “This is bad,” said Carol, and CJ rolled her eyes. “You think? Where is everyone?” “Leo’s room. They want you in there.” ‘Everyone’, it became apparent, as CJ drew closer to Leo’s office, included the President himself. “And what,” Jed Bartlet was saying, “was Barnett thinking , sending ships crewed with cadets ? Someone get me Starfleet on the comm...

Movie Review: Transformers 2: Revenge Of The Fallen

... that all looked like Megatron to me. Actually, there is one Decepticon who has a face I can recognize, and that would be Wheelie, the little toy truck character who changes sides halfway through the film for no apparent reason. Remember these words should you go see this film: Wheelie has Steve Buscemi 's face. You think that's a joke, but it's not. You will see Wheelie in the movie, and you'll ...

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... or forty or sixty years, staring at his father's face. Lapsing into pessimism, I think of my own father and mother. Jitinder twitches every few minutes, though no change in Mme. Chattha's vitals is apparent. He swears that he sees fingers twitch or hears growing moans that no one else can hear. The acolyte/nurse gives him a cup of herbal tea, which seems to quiet him for a while, and whispers to...

Sparks 17: Flame-War

... all at once, but there was no way he could let it take over him. Not now, never again.  The stillness stretched on and he brushed a finer over the recently activated jack with his wrist. It was apparent to him lying there, that there was one option left. There was only way to save a species that mostly like bordered on extinction and he knew in that moment, he was willing to make such a ...

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.... I wonder if I should invite Steve on-board? Right. Hannah should be home in about 25 minutes or so, and I am going to have quite an early night, as the past few days I have been exhausted. For no apparent reason. Tomorrow I plan to clean out my computer, that has about 4 inches of dust around it, and I am afraid Joel may kill me if he sees the state it's in. Colonel Barker. The Man with a ...

Springer shifted uncomfortably against the wall, drifting in and out of recharge.  The base seemed eerily quiet, the only apparent sounds coming from the med bay where they all were.  Steeljaw was still lying on the berth, Blaster and Beachcomber hovering near him. He'd managed to drink most of the cube of energon without spilling too much over him.  Of course, now it was dry, it was beginning to...

The Suburbia Affair

...? Peaceful Haven Estates is so obviously in Southern California but appears to exist in an alternate universe: perhaps a state of mind? Illya squeals into the driveway in that big, baby blue Chrysler convertible, an apparent kidnap victim. He doesn’t know what’s going on and why Solo hasn’t taken the time to explain on the drive there eludes me. As the real estate agent extols the virtues of ...

... woman appears in the Nexus, not seeming to notice the change in her surroundings - or maybe she just doesn't care. Her hands are curled into fists, and to anyone who happens to be looking, it's apparent that she's fighting very hard to keep a straight face. She takes a few deep breaths, trying to calm herself, but it doesn't work. "Damn it!" Suddenly, she lashes out, bringing her fists down on ...